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　　in  ten  years    i   will   be   a   reporter       and    i   think    i    will    live   in   beijing      because     i  think   as  a    student     w e  shuold    love     our    counrtry     and    our    capital       i    willl   live   in      a    apartment     with    my    friends      because  i    do    not      like    living    alone     i   think   as  a   reporter    i    will    meet    a  lot   of      interesting       people         i   am  a   outgoing    girl       i  want  to  be    a   reporter     b ecause    i   like     talking    with    people        i    have   a  lot  of    friends        i   know    if    i   want  to   be      a   reporter    i     should    study    hard    and   get  good   grades   

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　　1.文章没分段，没有标点符号，句首字母应该大写，还要注意单词i的书写和标题的首字母大写。

　　2.and i think i will live in beijing because i think as a student w e shuold love our counrtry and our capital 此句前后没有明显的因果关系,可以改为:and i think i will live in beijing because i went to beijing last year and fell in love with it .

　　3.in a apartment应为in an apartment.

　　4.a outgoing girl 应为an outgoing girl.

　　5 .i want to be a reporter because i like talking with people i have a lot of friends 可改为i want to be a reporter because i like talking with people and want to have a lot of friends.

　　参考例句(文)

　　in ten years i will be a reporter.

　　and i think i will live in beijing because i went to beijing last year and i fell in love with it.i think i will live in an apartment with my friends because i do not like living alone .i think as a reporter i will meet a lot of interesting people .i am an outgoing girl,so i want to be a reporter because i like talking with people and want to have a lot of friends .

　　i know if i want to be a reporter i should study hard and get good grades now.

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