Mydream

　　predict the future can be difficult. there are many famous predictions that came true. i’m jack, my dream is i have a robot named superman. he can help me clean the room, do the chores. and he can play with me. he help with the house work and do the most unpleasant jobs and things.

　　i think my dream will come true in the future!

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　　1. predict the future can be difficult. 改为 predicting the future can be difficult.

　　2. i’m jack, my dream is i have a robot named superman. 改为 i’m jack, my dream is to have a robot named superman.

　　3. he help with the house work and do the most unpleasant jobs and things. 改为he can help with the house work and do the most unpleasant jobs and things.

　　4.作者对自己梦想充满信心，叙述连贯，语言流畅。

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