Mysummerholiday

　　the summer holiday will come. i plan to go to taiwan for my holiday this year. taiwan is the largest island in china. taiwan is near the sea, so the weather is the same as fuzhou, sometimes very hot in summer. but there are lots of fruits that pretty delicious. taiwan is famous for mount ali and riyuetan. there are also hot springs. i will enjoy it and spend a relaxing vacation. i can’t wait to fly there. i believe strongly that i will have a great time in taiwan.

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　　1. taiwan is near the sea, so the weather is the same as fuzhou, 改为taiwan is near the sea, so the weather is the same as that in fuzhou,

　　2. but there are lots of fruits that pretty delicious. 改为but there are lots of delicious fruits.

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