Apresentformother

　　it’s sunday, i realized it was mother’s birthday. i want to give her a special present to make her happy. then i had a good idea. i could help her do chores. next, i sweeped the floor. took out the trash and did the dishes. finally, i made meals.

　　while i was waiting for mom, she came back. i said: “ happy birthday to you.” she was so happy that she could say nothing

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　　1. next, i sweeped the floor. 改为next, i swept the floor.

　　2. 文章叙事清楚，语句通顺，我们都要为自己的母亲做点力所能及的事。

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