a trip to china dinosaur park
on april 10th, my classmates and i went on a spring outing to china dinosaur park in changzhou. we met at school at seven fifteen and started our trip by coach. we arrived there at about half past eight.
first, we took photos in front of the gate. then immediately we rushed to the first game---crossing jurassic. the line of people waiting outside was endless. i thought it hopeless to wait. but at last, we were successful and it was our turn. four of us got into a small boat and started our magical trip. the boat went slowly through a dark tunnel with the settings of jurassic time. we could see many model dinosaurs rising from big holes. they were decorated with colorful lights. from time to time, they made loud sounds like shouting which made us very frightened. at that moment, two of us felt so frightened that we started to sing ‘two tigers’. at last, we came out from the dark and the boat rushed down from a very high place to a big pool at high speed. it was so exciting. we screamed with excitement through the whole rush. our clothes were all wet but we felt excited and wanted to play it again.
then we ran to play super swing, which was also very breathtaking. it looked like a tree with many swings. with the pleasant music, the swings turned in circle. the wind was soft and i felt as if i was flying in the sky. there was nothing in my mind and i felt very happy because i was just like a bird without wings. the swings were running faster and faster and people screamed with joy. i was a little dizzy but it was an exciting experience.
how time flied! it was time to go back home. it was the most exciting trip i have ever had. i hope i will again come to visit if i have time.
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a trip to china dinosaur park
on april 10th, my classmates and i went on a spring outing to china dinosaur park in changzhou. we met at school at seven fifteen and started our trip by coach. we arrived there at about half past eight.
first, we took photos in front of the gate. then immediately we rushed to the first game---crossing jurassic. the line of people waiting outside was endless. i thought it hopeless to wait. but at last, we were successful and it was our turn. four of us got into a small boat and started our magical trip. the boat went slowly through a dark tunnel with the settings of jurassic time. we could see many model dinosaurs rising from big holes. they were decorated with colorful lights. from time to time, they made loud sounds like shouting which made us very frightened. at that moment, two of us felt so frightened that we started to sing ‘two tigers’. at last, we came out from the dark and the boat rushed down from a very high place to a big pool at high speed. it was so exciting. we screamed with excitement through the whole rush. our clothes were all wet but we felt excited and wanted to play it again.
then we ran to play super swing, which was also very breathtaking. it looked like a tree with many swings. with the pleasant music, the swings turned in circle. the wind was soft and i felt as if i was flying in the sky. there was nothing in my mind and i felt very happy because i was just like a bird without wings. the swings were running faster and faster and people screamed with joy. i was a little dizzy but it was an exciting experience.
how time flied! it was time to go back home. it was the most exciting trip i have ever had. i hope i will again come to visit if i have time.
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a trip to china dinosaur park
on april 10th, my classmates and i went on a spring outing to china dinosaur park in changzhou. we met at school at seven fifteen and started our trip by coach. we arrived there at about half past eight.
first, we took photos in front of the gate. then immediately we rushed to the first game---crossing jurassic. the line of people waiting outside was endless. i thought it hopeless to wait. but at last, we were successful and it was our turn. four of us got into a small boat and started our magical trip. the boat went slowly through a dark tunnel with the settings of jurassic time. we could see many model dinosaurs rising from big holes. they were decorated with colorful lights. from time to time, they made loud sounds like shouting which made us very frightened. at that moment, two of us felt so frightened that we started to sing ‘two tigers’. at last, we came out from the dark and the boat rushed down from a very high place to a big pool at high speed. it was so exciting. we screamed with excitement through the whole rush. our clothes were all wet but we felt excited and wanted to play it again.
then we ran to play super swing, which was also very breathtaking. it looked like a tree with many swings. with the pleasant music, the swings turned in circle. the wind was soft and i felt as if i was flying in the sky. there was nothing in my mind and i felt very happy because i was just like a bird without wings. the swings were running faster and faster and people screamed with joy. i was a little dizzy but it was an exciting experience.
how time flied! it was time to go back home. it was the most exciting trip i have ever had. i hope i will again come to visit if i have time.
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